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CivicLx
01-07-2006, 01:24 PM
I'll start and then continue if you'd like.

Ya'll know the big dawg they call him the swiss master
Forget battling with a racquet and just get yourself a pastor
Steffi's Grand slam titles, I think he might pass her
Put Navi at the net and all day he could pass her
Breakin more hearts then a natural diseaster (no DR in regards to tsunami, Katrina etc)
Since he's been on top it's been a complete take over
Having first round opponents feeling like they got bent over
Dude's got game even when he ain't sober
Oh and speaking of bending over, where's your girl Benesova
Wine her, dine her then put her *** in back the Range Rover
Anyway back to your man Fed and the s*** that he's done
Try and tell me a title that homey hasn't won (know please don't it's simply a rhyme)
I guess Andy can forget about seeing number one
Got the competition sweatin while he's out having fun


I've got more but the hard part is finding the parts to change the rhyming words i.e. from "master" rhymes to "take over" now to "...that he's done"..."fun" is the last word I'm going to use off of "done" but I'm not sure how to change it up...I love rap but don't know much about writing them...want to make a smooth transition to where the words can sound like a nice smooth flow and the rapper wouldn't have to really do it with his voice...

35ft6
01-07-2006, 03:16 PM
Float like a butterfly / Sting like a bee
His magnum is a Pro Staff / Murdering MC's
Take his show on the road / To the land down under
Serve like lightning / The forehand, thunder
Prize money he'll plunder / He never blunder
His game is so dope / Makes you wonder...
Nah, he ain't a doper / But his style is dope
Playing him is like suicide / And he'll hand you the rope
So that you can hang yourself / And end the misery
There's been other great tennis players / But none like this you see
Flying off to Wimbledon / To smoke some of that grass
You'll be handing him that trophy / He'll be handing you that ***
On the red clays of Rome / He be feeling right at home
Dropping aces and winners / All up in your dome
At the US Open in Queens / He's got all the *****' shook

Dude, my rhymes are weaksauce. Mad props to Eminem, Mos Def, and Nas, peope who can actually write worth a dang.

CivicLx
01-07-2006, 04:45 PM
Float like a butterfly / Sting like a bee
His magnum is a Pro Staff / Murdering MC's
Take his show on the road / To the land down under
Serve like lightning / The forehand, thunder
Prize money he'll plunder / He never blunder
His game is so dope / Makes you wonder...
Nah, he ain't a doper / But his style is dope
Playing him is like suicide / And he'll hand you the rope
So that you can hang yourself / And end the misery
There's been other great tennis players / But none like this you see
Flying off to Wimbledon / To smoke some of that grass
You'll be handing him that trophy / He'll be handing you that ***
On the red clays of Rome / He be feeling right at home
Dropping aces and winners / All up in your dome
At the US Open in Queens / He's got all the *****' shook

Dude, my rhymes are weaksauce. Mad props to Eminem, Mos Def, and Nas, peope who can actually write worth a dang.


hahaha...man I bolded what I thought were the best lines...lol...that may have been a joke but I'd bump that in my Daewoo:mrgreen:

hey just thought of this...

thought my **** was aight, but I'm feelin like a clown
ever since 35 spit that hot **** and made me bow down!! (Westside Connection fan I am but I ain't no Stan and I'm done cleaing out my closet:)

keep it coming 35...if you want...and anyone can switch up the player if they want...don't have to stick to Fed if you don't want

CivicLx
01-07-2006, 04:54 PM
just another little OT from my orig post but since you mention eminem 35...what do think are his favorite songs? I've never been a big fan...not really feeling the whole kill the girlfriend put her in the trunk stuff...rap can be brutal I know but just never got into eminem...also his voice on songs like My Name Is and the real slim shady song, I just don't care for, but "Lose Yourself" is a fawking classic...song won an oscar...his flow is sick, the beat is sick and the message is inspiring...
no more games, I'm gonna change what you call rage
tear this mother****in roof off like 2 dogs caged
I was playin in the beginning, the mood all changed
I've been chewed up and spit out and booed off stage
but I kept rhymin, step...I have to look the rest up but that whole 3rd verse is hot...Sing for the moment, mosh and toy soldiers I also thought were just great tracks...so many people talk about him being so great lyrically and reading the lyrics for Sing For the Moment...i really realized that...about the part the house with no swearin, parents gettin upset when the son has the headphones blarin...the part about the parents don't give a damn about rappers but the rappers are heroes to their children...

anyway, not to get way OT here or anything, but just since you mention em, just wanted to share that and see what you think...anyway this thread probably won't get much traffic but thanks for taking the time to come up with that verse

CivicLx
01-07-2006, 05:07 PM
[QUOTE=35ft6]Float like a butterfly / Sting like a bee
His magnum is a Pro Staff / Murdering MC's
Take his show on the road / To the land down under
Serve like lightning / The forehand, thunder
Prize money he'll plunder / He never blunder
His game is so dope / Makes you wonder...
Nah, he ain't a doper / But his style is dope
Playing him is like suicide / And he'll hand you the rope
So that you can hang yourself / And end the misery
There's been other great tennis players / But none like this you see
Flying off to Wimbledon / To smoke some of that grass
You'll be handing him that trophy / He'll be handing you that ***
On the red clays of Rome / He be feeling right at home
Dropping aces and winners / All up in your dome
At the US Open in Queens / He's got all the *****' shook
Even makes Hewitt look like he's a first year rook
How can you beat Fed when dude wrote the book
They shootin', aw made you look (love that song!)
Grand Slams, yeah he's got a few of those
Remember 04 US final, that **** wasn't even close
People in the audience sayin damn Hewitt blows


edit and switch to
How you expect to beat Fed when dude wrote the book
Photographers shootin', aw made you look
Remember that '04 Open Final, that **** wasn't even close
Had people in the audience sayin' damn Hewitt Blows
I use the same word to make rhymes for too long...like I said, I just can't get the transition from key rhyme word to key rhyme word...just an example, your transition on "murdering MC's" to "land down under" seemed pretty effortless

Muse
01-07-2006, 10:31 PM
Paging Senator Jay Bullworth... Senator, you're needed at the floor.

Docalex007
01-08-2006, 01:58 AM
Yo, yo, yo, yo...

Fedex express is well known by the rest
talkin' that s-h-i-t, Fed knows he's the best

All day and all night, Fedex hittin' winners
stealin' yo girl, makin' Hewitt look like a beginner

See the thing about Rog is that he'll smoke yo ***
faster than a bullet he'll run laps around yo ***
forehand down the line yo *** and ace yo ***
Pete is in retirement because Fed smoked his ***

He just got finished whoopin' French *** in the Middle East
made poor Monfils cry, can't nobody tame the beast
except Mirka, who be tendin' to his needs, eatin' that cheese and enjoying the feast

TW posters be hatin' on Fed
seeing him win everything, wishing he were dead
Fed's got a preposition for you playa
"Let's play a match and we'll see who'll be oozin' red."

yeah, yeah, yeah, *****, yeah, what, what...

jonolau
01-08-2006, 02:05 AM
Float like a butterfly / Sting like a bee
His magnum is a Pro Staff / Murdering MC's
Take his show on the road / To the land down under
Serve like lightning / The forehand, thunder
Prize money he'll plunder / He never blunder
His game is so dope / Makes you wonder...
Nah, he ain't a doper / But his style is dope
Playing him is like suicide / And he'll hand you the rope
So that you can hang yourself / And end the misery
There's been other great tennis players / But none like this you see
Flying off to Wimbledon / To smoke some of that grass
You'll be handing him that trophy / He'll be handing you that ***
On the red clays of Rome / He be feeling right at home
Dropping aces and winners / All up in your dome
At the US Open in Queens / He's got all the *****' shook

Dude, my rhymes are weaksauce. Mad props to Eminem, Mos Def, and Nas, peope who can actually write worth a dang.
Ha ha, I thought that came from Hemingway!

35ft6
01-08-2006, 11:24 AM
Ha ha, I thought that came from Hemingway! Nah, Hemingway never met a run-on sentence he didn't like. Crazy old cook.

c_zimma
01-08-2006, 01:28 PM
Beating everybody from China to Moscow,
Hey, Andy. Wheres your mojo now.
He makes his forehands pop and flow,
And when he does, 6-0. 6-0. 6-0.
Players who face him never want the match to end.
They think they might get a chance on ESPN Top Ten.
His game is filled with tons and tons of shot making.
Every Grand Slam is his for the taking.
So I'm gonna leave all of you on this note.
Fed's game is hot, you can forget the coat.

slice bh compliment
01-08-2006, 01:53 PM
We're white guys.
And we take no crap,
when we deliver our
Fed Rap.

I like his shots, the way he flies,
I like his wife. Just kidding, guy.
White guys.

[I admit to being a fan of Sat. Nt. Live's dark years....to the point of quoting Belushi's little brother. Hmmm, this is a new low for me.]

Drop_Shot
01-08-2006, 02:43 PM
Sounding good , when does the single come out ?

Pomeranian
01-08-2006, 02:55 PM
You guys talk like he's hope
Who the hell is he the pope?
He's got a backhand, I have to admit
But how long will his glory stay lit
I got nothing against the guy
Who can make the ball fly
Paint the lines
from the net or the baseline
But what the hell is this
I didn't know a fed cult exists
No offense to all who love him
But get a life, a job, or something
I don't care what this guy can do
If he can beat you left handed
Still make you look like a fool
If he was here even he would have demanded
"Dude pull up your pants"
"But you sir can bagel me"
"So? Don't flood me with raves or rants
Just put your damn *** back where it should be"

doriancito
01-08-2006, 06:52 PM
You guys talk like he's hope
Who the hell is he the pope?
He's got a backhand, I have to admit
But how long will his glory stay lit
I got nothing against the guy
Who can make the ball fly
Paint the lines
from the net or the baseline
But what the hell is this
I didn't know a fed cult exists
No offense to all who love him
But get a life, a job, or something
I don't care what this guy can do
If he can beat you left handed
Still make you look like a fool
If he was here even he would have demanded
"Dude pull up your pants"
"But you sir can bagel me"
"So? Don't flood me with raves or rants
Just put your damn *** back where it should be"


this one is nic, ica n make a nice rythm since i play the drums

ShooterMcMarco
01-08-2006, 07:32 PM
Nice POEMS. Pomeranian, do you really own a pom? I do :)

legolas
01-08-2006, 07:53 PM
We're white guys.
And we take no crap,
when we deliver our
Fed Rap.

I like his shots, the way he flies,
I like his wife. Just kidding, guy.
White guys.

[I admit to being a fan of Sat. Nt. Live's dark years....to the point of quoting Belushi's little brother. Hmmm, this is a new low for me.]
LMFAO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

ShooterMcMarco
01-08-2006, 07:58 PM
you guys are pretty good at this.

Pomeranian
01-09-2006, 04:14 PM
Nice POEMS. Pomeranian, do you really own a pom? I do :)
yup. I had one before my current one that lived to be 15 years old, she was one of the poms that didn't get too shrunk by breeding. I have a toy size pom that's adorable but really mischievous. They are my favorite breed, I was suprised this screen name wasn't taken, but now I see most names are about tennis is one way or another.

35ft6
01-09-2006, 04:22 PM
They are my favorite breed, I was suprised this screen name wasn't taken, but now I see most names are about tennis is one way or another. You should go to a message board for dog lovers and register as "Slice Serve."

c_zimma
01-09-2006, 04:38 PM
Yeah, Pomeranian is right. He's got about 10,000 #1 fans
But his games almost as tight as his Swoosh head band.
When your names next to his on the wall in the players room,
Book your flight, call your mom, tell her you'll see her soon.
His game - insane.
Future Plans - the hall of fame.
Is here to entertain.
But cannot be tamed.
Is he to be blamed.
He just does what he does:
Removes the ball from the fuzz.
You was what you was.
Now go chill in the hot tub.

CivicLx
01-09-2006, 05:09 PM
Yeah, Pomeranian is right. He's got about 10,000 #1 fans
But his games almost as tight as his Swoosh head band.
When your names next to his on the wall in the players room,
Book your flight, call your mom, tell her you'll see her soon.
His game - insane.
Future Plans - the hall of fame.
Is here to entertain.
But cannot be tamed.
Is he to be blamed.
He just does what he does:
Removes the ball from the fuzz.
You was what you was.
Now go chill in the hot tub.


nice...here's something that could be used about the Americans performing in Australia.

now the tour is called atp and i hope your games tight
not even the warm weather can make your future look bright
so go warn Sydney it's an American rebellion
puttin foots in your *** is how we speak australian
trained in the art of whoop ***, check the accolades
got a knife and we're handin' out free after shaves
plus a new actin' gig take a look at the script
it's called one up in the chamber and four on the hip

Noelle
01-09-2006, 10:33 PM
Are you guys trying to give Vince Spadea a run for his money? ;)

CivicLx
01-10-2006, 11:30 AM
lol...hey maybe all of us can get together and do a collabo with him