Help Me With My Fed Rap!!!!!

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  1. CivicLx

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    I'll start and then continue if you'd like.

    Ya'll know the big dawg they call him the swiss master
    Forget battling with a racquet and just get yourself a pastor
    Steffi's Grand slam titles, I think he might pass her
    Put Navi at the net and all day he could pass her
    Breakin more hearts then a natural diseaster (no DR in regards to tsunami, Katrina etc)
    Since he's been on top it's been a complete take over
    Having first round opponents feeling like they got bent over
    Dude's got game even when he ain't sober
    Oh and speaking of bending over, where's your girl Benesova
    Wine her, dine her then put her ass in back the Range Rover
    Anyway back to your man Fed and the s*** that he's done
    Try and tell me a title that homey hasn't won (know please don't it's simply a rhyme)
    I guess Andy can forget about seeing number one
    Got the competition sweatin while he's out having fun


    I've got more but the hard part is finding the parts to change the rhyming words i.e. from "master" rhymes to "take over" now to "...that he's done"..."fun" is the last word I'm going to use off of "done" but I'm not sure how to change it up...I love rap but don't know much about writing them...want to make a smooth transition to where the words can sound like a nice smooth flow and the rapper wouldn't have to really do it with his voice...
     
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  2. 35ft6

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    Float like a butterfly / Sting like a bee
    His magnum is a Pro Staff / Murdering MC's
    Take his show on the road / To the land down under
    Serve like lightning / The forehand, thunder
    Prize money he'll plunder / He never blunder
    His game is so dope / Makes you wonder...
    Nah, he ain't a doper / But his style is dope
    Playing him is like suicide / And he'll hand you the rope
    So that you can hang yourself / And end the misery
    There's been other great tennis players / But none like this you see
    Flying off to Wimbledon / To smoke some of that grass
    You'll be handing him that trophy / He'll be handing you that ass
    On the red clays of Rome / He be feeling right at home
    Dropping aces and winners / All up in your dome
    At the US Open in Queens / He's got all the *****' shook

    Dude, my rhymes are weaksauce. Mad props to Eminem, Mos Def, and Nas, peope who can actually write worth a dang.
     
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  3. CivicLx

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    hahaha...man I bolded what I thought were the best lines...lol...that may have been a joke but I'd bump that in my Daewoo:mrgreen:

    hey just thought of this...

    thought my **** was aight, but I'm feelin like a clown
    ever since 35 spit that hot **** and made me bow down!! (Westside Connection fan I am but I ain't no Stan and I'm done cleaing out my closet:)

    keep it coming 35...if you want...and anyone can switch up the player if they want...don't have to stick to Fed if you don't want
     
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  4. CivicLx

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    just another little OT from my orig post but since you mention eminem 35...what do think are his favorite songs? I've never been a big fan...not really feeling the whole kill the girlfriend put her in the trunk stuff...rap can be brutal I know but just never got into eminem...also his voice on songs like My Name Is and the real slim shady song, I just don't care for, but "Lose Yourself" is a fawking classic...song won an oscar...his flow is sick, the beat is sick and the message is inspiring...
    no more games, I'm gonna change what you call rage
    tear this mother****in roof off like 2 dogs caged
    I was playin in the beginning, the mood all changed
    I've been chewed up and spit out and booed off stage
    but I kept rhymin, step...I have to look the rest up but that whole 3rd verse is hot...Sing for the moment, mosh and toy soldiers I also thought were just great tracks...so many people talk about him being so great lyrically and reading the lyrics for Sing For the Moment...i really realized that...about the part the house with no swearin, parents gettin upset when the son has the headphones blarin...the part about the parents don't give a damn about rappers but the rappers are heroes to their children...

    anyway, not to get way OT here or anything, but just since you mention em, just wanted to share that and see what you think...anyway this thread probably won't get much traffic but thanks for taking the time to come up with that verse
     
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    Paging Senator Jay Bullworth... Senator, you're needed at the floor.
     
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  7. Docalex007

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    Yo, yo, yo, yo...

    Fedex express is well known by the rest
    talkin' that s-h-i-t, Fed knows he's the best

    All day and all night, Fedex hittin' winners
    stealin' yo girl, makin' Hewitt look like a beginner

    See the thing about Rog is that he'll smoke yo ass
    faster than a bullet he'll run laps around yo ass
    forehand down the line yo ass and ace yo ass
    Pete is in retirement because Fed smoked his ass

    He just got finished whoopin' French ass in the Middle East
    made poor Monfils cry, can't nobody tame the beast
    except Mirka, who be tendin' to his needs, eatin' that cheese and enjoying the feast

    TW posters be hatin' on Fed
    seeing him win everything, wishing he were dead
    Fed's got a preposition for you playa
    "Let's play a match and we'll see who'll be oozin' red."

    yeah, yeah, yeah, *****, yeah, what, what...
     
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  8. jonolau

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    Ha ha, I thought that came from Hemingway!
     
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  9. 35ft6

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    Nah, Hemingway never met a run-on sentence he didn't like. Crazy old cook.
     
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  10. c_zimma

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    Beating everybody from China to Moscow,
    Hey, Andy. Wheres your mojo now.
    He makes his forehands pop and flow,
    And when he does, 6-0. 6-0. 6-0.
    Players who face him never want the match to end.
    They think they might get a chance on ESPN Top Ten.
    His game is filled with tons and tons of shot making.
    Every Grand Slam is his for the taking.
    So I'm gonna leave all of you on this note.
    Fed's game is hot, you can forget the coat.
     
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  11. slice bh compliment

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    Not claiming any skills, mad or otherwise.

    We're white guys.
    And we take no crap,
    when we deliver our
    Fed Rap.

    I like his shots, the way he flies,
    I like his wife. Just kidding, guy.
    White guys.

    [I admit to being a fan of Sat. Nt. Live's dark years....to the point of quoting Belushi's little brother. Hmmm, this is a new low for me.]
     
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  12. Drop_Shot

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    Sounding good , when does the single come out ?
     
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  13. Pomeranian

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    You guys talk like he's hope
    Who the hell is he the pope?
    He's got a backhand, I have to admit
    But how long will his glory stay lit
    I got nothing against the guy
    Who can make the ball fly
    Paint the lines
    from the net or the baseline
    But what the hell is this
    I didn't know a fed cult exists
    No offense to all who love him
    But get a life, a job, or something
    I don't care what this guy can do
    If he can beat you left handed
    Still make you look like a fool
    If he was here even he would have demanded
    "Dude pull up your pants"
    "But you sir can bagel me"
    "So? Don't flood me with raves or rants
    Just put your damn ass back where it should be"
     
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  14. doriancito

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    this one is nic, ica n make a nice rythm since i play the drums
     
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  15. ShooterMcMarco

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    Nice POEMS. Pomeranian, do you really own a pom? I do :)
     
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  16. legolas

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    LMFAO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
     
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  17. ShooterMcMarco

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    you guys are pretty good at this.
     
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  18. Pomeranian

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    yup. I had one before my current one that lived to be 15 years old, she was one of the poms that didn't get too shrunk by breeding. I have a toy size pom that's adorable but really mischievous. They are my favorite breed, I was suprised this screen name wasn't taken, but now I see most names are about tennis is one way or another.
     
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  19. 35ft6

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    You should go to a message board for dog lovers and register as "Slice Serve."
     
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  20. c_zimma

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    Yeah, Pomeranian is right. He's got about 10,000 #1 fans
    But his games almost as tight as his Swoosh head band.
    When your names next to his on the wall in the players room,
    Book your flight, call your mom, tell her you'll see her soon.
    His game - insane.
    Future Plans - the hall of fame.
    Is here to entertain.
    But cannot be tamed.
    Is he to be blamed.
    He just does what he does:
    Removes the ball from the fuzz.
    You was what you was.
    Now go chill in the hot tub.
     
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  21. CivicLx

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    nice...here's something that could be used about the Americans performing in Australia.

    now the tour is called atp and i hope your games tight
    not even the warm weather can make your future look bright
    so go warn Sydney it's an American rebellion
    puttin foots in your ass is how we speak australian
    trained in the art of whoop ass, check the accolades
    got a knife and we're handin' out free after shaves
    plus a new actin' gig take a look at the script
    it's called one up in the chamber and four on the hip
     
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  22. Noelle

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    Are you guys trying to give Vince Spadea a run for his money? ;)
     
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  23. CivicLx

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    lol...hey maybe all of us can get together and do a collabo with him
     
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