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Great story. Emo culture still lives. Well, sorta.
Hey, if you added some irony to it, or a circuitous moral....or maybe rely less upon a character name and add a detail that helps to flesh out the character of the dad, the mom or Kei himself.
Like maybe a particular part of the breakfast (nice touch from DP, btw)...the mom's hairclip or bauble, the dad's old shirt or the smell of his hair in the carseats...some touchstone to help the reader in a little bit more rather than relying upon the sock, horror and anguish of loss/death.
I don't know. I'm not saying you need to make a short story long. But develop it some more. That's a part of writing.
Hey, if you added some irony to it, or a circuitous moral....or maybe rely less upon a character name and add a detail that helps to flesh out the character of the dad, the mom or Kei himself.
Like maybe a particular part of the breakfast (nice touch from DP, btw)...the mom's hairclip or bauble, the dad's old shirt or the smell of his hair in the carseats...some touchstone to help the reader in a little bit more rather than relying upon the sock, horror and anguish of loss/death.
I don't know. I'm not saying you need to make a short story long. But develop it some more. That's a part of writing.